Writing Goal - Results

My goal in writing is :
To use words and phases to grab the readers attention and interest. I also need to focus on one idea in a paragraph.
I have chosen this goal because:
This is what I need work on to get a better score and to move up in writing and get better for future purposes.
To achieve this goal I will need:
I will work on my vocabulary and read more books.

LEPROSY RECOUNT

My Recount on Leprosy:

As I woke up I saw the sunrise and had some hope that I would get out of here. I was waiting for my breakfast from Mr Thomas (Care Taker). I got up and started the fire since it had been cold for the last few days. I looked outside and saw the little white fence and started dreaming. Finally Mr Thomas has arrived he was wearing a blue jacket with black pants and what had he got for me? I got a plate of toast with butter and thought if I was at home I would have gotten a buffet of food. Lost in thought I had my breakfast  I went to read my books since it is the only thing that makes me happy. After reading about 4 books I heard my canary squeaking and thought he might be hungry I fed him and gave him some water and went outside to get fresh air. Hearing the sound of the birds made me so delighted. It was 12.00. I saw the caretaker coming and stood up in pain and walked towards him. He put my lunch on the table and said to me “ Here you go” and then walked off. After I had eaten my lunch I went to listen to my record player. I listened to a variety of songs and fell asleep. I woke up and saw the time it was 5.00. I went outside and started speaking to my canary. I could see the sun setting and went inside. Mr Thomas had already put my dinner on the table and I went to eat it. By the time I had finished it was 8.30. It was time for bed. I thought in my head another day. Sigh.

For this task I had to imagine myself with leprosy.  

VENN DIAGRAM ABOUT GEROMINO STILTON AND TRAP STILTON

What am I leaning: I am learning to create a Venn Diagram about the story I am reading.
How does this show my learning: I think this shows my learning because I have listed what they have in common and what they don't have in common.
What am I wondering:  I am wondering is Geronimo a rat or a mouse.

Poetry Anthology !!!!!!!!!!

In Writing we have been learning how to create our own original poems and here is my best one !!!!!

DIAMOND POEM

A Snake

slippery scales

Slithering slowly across

With sharp fangs

Ahhhhh

Crazy Cinquain

Summer

Bright, Beautiful

People, Children, Ice-Cream

Sun, Always Shining In Summer

MY CHILDHOOD MEMOIR

On a bitterly cold morning I walked through the gates of Hornby High. I felt isolated since I was the only one that had arrived with no friends. I was wearing the Hornby High School uniform it felt very different from primary.

I heard the bell go. Everyone was standing in line waiting, it felt like we had been waiting for hours. Eventually the teacher had arrived. About time. We sat on the mat, everything went dead silent. Everyone had straight faces. Our teacher was Miss Richardson. She looked entertaining and had a good sense of humor. There were people from different schools which made me more anxious.

Finally the sun had came out and day had gotten warmer. The first day we went outside to play games. I had forgotten my P.E uniform just amazing. Other people in my class had forgotten it as well. So I wasn’t the only one. We played games on the field it didn't really interest me.

We played sack races and I was in a team with all my friends from primary. I went first and it was very difficult to run in a sack realising not to go first. As everyone in my team finished we moved on to the earth ball. The earth was really big and as you touched it your hand would sink in. We were in teams of 8 and there were 2 teams. Running in school uniform was really difficult because you were running in a skirt which made it more harder.