Once there was a girl called Sierra. She is 10 years old. Sierra had bright blue eyes and long brown hair with a red ribbon attached to it. Sierra is a nice, calm and competitive girl she also likes baking. She was on camp with the school. It was a wide open place with trees and gardens spread as wide as the eye could see. It was a bright place and the sun was shining. Sierra decided to walk into the forests and admire the trees with her friend Annie. When they got half way through the forest a bell rang to go back to the camping site. Annie said “ We should go back,Miss Bell is going to be very mad. You know how she is”,.
“You go on I will be right behind you” said Sierra. So Annie walked back. Sierra was just about walk back when fairies started roaming around her. These fairies were very unusual looking. They had sparkling hair that shimmered in the sunlight. They also had mermaid looking tails and long braided hair. Their faces looked confused as if they never seen human before.
I really like how you used good and interesting vocabulary and I think you could improve on working on some comma's.
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